Submitted by Anonymous on Wed, 03/03/2010 - 23:30.
The account is informative and clearly reveals your research into the chosen subject. There is a fine balance between factual details and personal opinions. However, given the piece is quite matter-of-fact, was the first paragraph really necessary?
The account is informative
The account is informative and clearly reveals your research into the chosen subject. There is a fine balance between factual details and personal opinions. However, given the piece is quite matter-of-fact, was the first paragraph really necessary?